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    Location and form of power/aide

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    Location and form of power/aide
    Message de margaux18 posté le 06-05-2017 à 19:39:59 (S | E | F)
    Bonjour,
    j'ai rédigé ma notion "Location and form of power" pour le Bac. Pouvez-vous m'aider à la corriger s'il vous plait ?
    Merci d'avance !!

    The notion I’m going to deal with is Location and form of power. To begin with, I’d like to give a definition of the notion. Location can be a place or a country. It may be also important buildings or institutions that represent a certain form of power. Power is the ability to control or to make things happen. In order to live together members of a community, in a location accept rules and laws. This is to create social cohesion but it can also lead to conflicts and tensions. We can evoke the power of a head of state on his nation, the power of the media or the power of the economic system.
    To illustrate the notion, I have chosen to talk about the judiciary power in the United States of America.
    So we can wonder, to what extent can we say that Americans have the power of life or death on their fellow citizens? Firstly, we are going to focus on the right of carry guns and secondly we will show that Americans have the right to legally kill people by using the death penalty.

    To begin with, Americans can carry guns and protect themselves. It all started when the Pilgrim Fathers left England because of religion persecution and arrived in America. They met Natives and slaughtered the Indians down. Then, in 1776, they had to fight the British for their independence and wrote the second amendment which allowed them to use guns. So, to carry guns became a constitutional right. Nowadays, there is also an arm’s lobbying which incite people to buy guns. It’s a big business in the US and more guns are being manufactured than ever before.
    Moreover, for many Americans, guns represent the heart of their nation’s foundation and identity, a symbol of their freedom. With such widespread gun ownership in America, it can seem more logical to have a gun yourself. If you grow up in a culture where gun ownership is normal, imposing any kind of regulation is difficult. So Americans are attached to guns.
    There are also organizations which support guns like the National Rifle Association. We have seen in class, a video by the NRA about his leader, Charlton Heston. He was an actor and an American political activist. He was president of the NRA from 1998 to 2003. During all his life, he was defending freedom and the second amendment. Also, he finished his speeches by saying “If you want to take my gun, you’ll have to take it from my cold dead hand”.

    Yet this right is controversial. There has been much debate about limiting or not the right to carry guns over the last decades. Indeed, there are a lot of guns murdered in the US. We saw in class, in a Brady campaign’s poster that in the US, guns murdered almost 10 000 people. However, it’s 17 people in Finland or 60 in Spain, where people are not allowed to carry guns. The Brady campaign wants to prevent gun violence, to show that sensible gun laws save lives. Moreover, you can buy a gun too easily. We saw in class in an article from the New York Times that in 2012, a gunman killed 12 people and wounded 59 at a Colorado cinema during the premiere of the Batman movie "The Dark Knight Rises”. He armed himself with an assault rifle, a shotgun and a pistol and all the weapons were bought legally. The shooting has once again reignited the debate on gun control in America. This shooting brings back memories of the 1999 Columbine High School murders, just 25km from the cinema, in which 13 people lost their lives.
    Tragedies like this are becoming all too common but do little to get tighter gun controls enforced.

    Secondly, we can say that the Americans have the power of life or death on their citizens because they can legally kill people by using the death penalty.
    Capital punishment is a legal sentence in the USA in 32 states. But its application is limited by the eighth amendment and to certain cases, to certain states. The electric chair is used only in Nebraska because nowadays in the other states, they use lethal injection.
    We can take the example of Pennsylvania. Death penalty is only applied to aggravating murders like killing a police officer on duty, killing someone while perpetrating another felony or if the offenders torture and murder their victim. Nevertheless, in Texas there are more people on death row and there are more executions than anywhere else. It’s a sort of tradition, their history of being sort of the “Wild West” where gun ownership is common.

    But we have to remember that today, the number of executions in the USA decrease a lot. There was around one hundred executions in 1998 whereas twenty in 2016. We saw in class in a poll by Lake Research Partners that a clear majority of citizens would choose a punishment other than the death penalty.
    Furthermore, death penalty is controversial because it’s an infringement of human rights and a waste of a lifetime.
    Besides, people say that even after committed a crime, people can change and they do deserve another chance. We saw in class an extract of The Green Mile produced by Frank Darabont which denounces the fact that innocent people can be victims of the death penalty. It shows how some of them may have been wrongly accused. For example, the character of John Coffey was found guilty of raping and murdering two young sisters.

    To conclude, we could advocate that there should be stricter laws and regulation such as to make people go through a psychological exam and to make it mandatory to get a permit. In addition, death penalty is controversial. Hence, the Americans have the power of life or death on their follow citizens in some measures and it’s different in every states.

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    Modifié par lucile83 le 06-05-2017 21:08


    Réponse : Location and form of power/aide de laure95, postée le 07-05-2017 à 12:05:34 (S | E)
    Bonjour,
    The notion I’m going to deal with is Location and form(s) of power.
    - the power of a head of state on his nation: ?
    - So we can wonder, to what extent can we (inverser l'ordre des mots car question indirecte)say that Americans have the power of life or death on their fellow citizens?
    - to legally kill people: ordre des mots.



    Réponse : Location and form of power/aide de laure95, postée le 07-05-2017 à 12:12:28 (S | E)
    suite,(1ére partie)
    - because of (article)religion (mettre l'adjectif)persecution
    - They met (article)Natives
    - they had to fight (préposition)the British
    - Nowadays, there is also an arm’s (pas de 's)lobbying which incite (faute de conjugaison) people to buy guns.
    - a video by the NRA about his (pas le bon possessif)leader, Charlton Heston.
    - He was (article)president of the NRA from 1998 to 2003.
    - During all his life, he was defending (preterit simple) freedom
    - Also,(pas à la bonne place) he finished his speeches

    - There has been much debate: mettre tout au pluriel.
    - a lot of guns murdered: ?
    - in (pas la bonne préposition) a Brady campaign’s poster that in the US, guns (have) murdered
    - However, it’s 17 people in Finland or 60 in Spain: mald it.
    - The (pas de the) Brady (marque de la possession)campaign wants to prevent (préposition)gun violence,
    - sensible gun: ?
    - at (pas la bonne préposition)a Colorado cinema
    - the 1999 Columbine High School (marque de la possession) murders,
    - enforced: reinforced



    Réponse : Location and form of power/aide de laure95, postée le 07-05-2017 à 12:17:33 (S | E)
    2è partie,
    - (article)Capital punishment
    - if the offenders torture and murder their victim (pluriel).
    - their history of being sort of the “Wild West”: ?

    - today, the number of executions in the USA decrease a lot: mettre au present en be +-ing.
    - There was around one hundred exécutions: there was + singulier.
    - Furthermore,(article) death penalty is controversial because it’s an infringement of (article)human rights and a waste of a (pas de a) lifetime.
    - after committed: after + verbe + ing.

    - In addition, (article)death penalty is controversial.
    - every states: every + singulier.

    Il manque une phrase de fin.



    Réponse : Location and form of power/aide de margaux18, postée le 07-05-2017 à 12:28:32 (S | E)

    The notion I’m going to deal with is Location and form of power. To
    begin with, I’d like to give a definition of the notion. Location can be a
    place or a country. It may be also important buildings or institutions that
    represent a certain form of power. Power is the ability to control or to make
    things happen. In order to live together members of a community, in a location
    accept rules and laws. This is to create social cohesion but it can also lead
    to conflicts and tensions. We can evoke the power of a president on his nation,
    the power of the media or the power of the economic system. To illustrate the notion, I have chosen to talk about the judiciary
    power in the United States of America. So we can wonder, to what extent we can say that Americans have the
    power of life or death on their fellow citizens? Firstly, we are going to focus
    on the right of carry guns and secondly we will show that Americans have the
    right to kill people legally by using the death penalty.


    To begin with, Americans can carry guns and protect themselves. It all
    started when the Pilgrim Fathers left England because of the religion
    persecution and arrived in America. They met the Natives and slaughtered the
    Indians down. Then, in 1776, they had to fight against the British for their
    independence and wrote the second amendment which allowed them to use guns. So,
    to carry guns became a constitutional right. Nowadays, there is also an arm
    lobbying which incites people to buy guns. It’s a big business in the US and
    more guns are being manufactured than ever before. Moreover, for many Americans, guns
    represent the heart of their nation’s foundation and identity, a symbol of
    their freedom. With such widespread gun ownership in America, it can
    seem more logical to have a gun yourself. If you grow up in a culture where gun
    ownership is normal, imposing any kind of regulation is difficult. So Americans
    are attached to guns. There are also organizations which support guns like the National Rifle
    Association. We have seen in class, a video by the NRA about it leader,
    Charlton Heston. He was an actor and an American political activist. He was the
    president of the NRA from 1998 to 2003. During all his life, he defended
    freedom and the second amendment. He finished also his speeches by saying “If
    you want to take my gun, you’ll have to take it from my cold dead hand”.


    Yet this right is controversial. There has been much
    debates about limiting or not the right to carry guns over the last decades. Indeed,
    there are a lot of people murdered because of the guns in the US. We saw in
    class, with a Brady campaign’s poster that in the US, guns have murdered almost
    10 000 people. However, only 17 people were killed with guns in Finland and 60
    in Spain, where people are not allowed to carry guns. Brady’s campaign wants to
    prevent the gun violence, to show that sensible gun laws save lives. Moreover,
    you can buy a gun too easily. We saw in class in an article from the New York
    Times that in 2012, a gunman killed 12 people and wounded 59 in a Colorado
    cinema during the premiere of the Batman movie "The Dark Knight Rises”. He
    armed himself with an assault rifle, a shotgun and a pistol and all the weapons
    were bought legally. The shooting has once again reignited the debate on gun
    control in America. This shooting brings back memories of the 1999 Columbine
    High School’s murders, just 25km from the cinema, in which 13 people lost their
    lives. Tragedies like this
    are becoming all too common but do little to get tighter gun controls reinforced.


    Secondly, we can say
    that the Americans have the power of life or death on their citizens because
    they can legally kill people by using the death penalty. The capital punishment is a legal sentence in the USA in 32 states. But
    its application is limited by the eighth amendment and to certain cases, to
    certain states. The electric chair is used only in Nebraska because nowadays in
    the other states, they use lethal injection. We can take the example of Pennsylvania. Death penalty is only applied
    to aggravating murders like killing a police officer on duty, killing someone
    while perpetrating another felony or if the offenders torture and murder their
    victims. Nevertheless, in Texas there are more people on death row and there
    are more executions than anywhere else. It’s a sort of tradition, their history
    relates a sort of the “Wild West” where gun ownership is common. 


    But we have to remember that today, the number of executions in the USA
    is decreasing a lot. There was around one hundred execution in 1998 whereas
    twenty in 2016. We saw in class in a poll by Lake Research Partners
    that a clear majority of citizens would choose a punishment other than the
    death penalty. Furthermore, the death penalty is controversial because it’s an infringement
    of the human rights and a waste of lifetime. Besides, people say that even
    after committing a crime, people can change and they do deserve another chance.
    We saw in class an extract of The Green Mile produced by Frank Darabont which
    denounces the fact that innocent people can be victims of the death penalty. It
    shows how some of them may have been wrongly accused. For example, the
    character of John Coffey was found guilty of raping and murdering two young
    sisters.


    To conclude, we could advocate that there should be stricter laws and
    regulation such as to make people go through a psychological exam and to make
    it mandatory to get a permit. In addition, the death penalty is controversial.
    Hence, the Americans have the power of life or death on their follow citizens
    in some measures and it’s different in every state. About the notion, we can
    add that the economical power is one of the most influent.





    Réponse : Location and form of power/aide de laure95, postée le 07-05-2017 à 18:10:21 (S | E)
    Bonsoir,
    - because of the religion (mettre l'adjectif pas le nom) persecution and arrived in America.
    - about it (ce n'est pas un possessif, mais tu n'es pas loin)leader
    - He finished also: ordre des mots.
    - There has (pluriel) been much (much + singulier) debates
    - because of the (pas de the)guns
    - prevent (préposition) the (pas de the) gun violence
    - There was (pluriel) around one hundred execution (pluriel)
    - their history elates (préposition)a sort of the “Wild West”




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