Correction/Life in GB

Correction/Life in GB
Message de thomasermel posté le 20-03-2016 à 22:54:44 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir,
je dois rendre un devoir en anglais,
Pourriez-vous y jeter un coup d°œil s'il vous plait ?
Merci
Farooq and Chanu have a very different approach of the life in Britain. For Farook Britain is the place where he became rich by importing food, where he found his family and where he find respect and acknowledgements. Chanu believe that Britain is depraved he know that people drink alcohol and go to nightclub. For him they don't act properly.
Behind them they didn't left the same king of life. Farooq left a life of poverty and ignorance.
Then Chanu believe that he left his traditions and all his culture.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-03-2016 23:55
Pas de rouge sur les forums, merci.

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Réponse: Correction/Life in GB de sherry48, postée le 20-03-2016 à 23:55:14 (S | E)
Hello. You have some minor mistakes.

Farooq and Chanu have a very different approach of the life in Britain. For Farook, Britain is the place where he became rich by importing food, where he found his family and where he find respect and acknowledgements. Chanu believe_ that Britain is depraved. He know that people drink alcohol and go to nightclub_. To him they don't act properly.
Behind them they didn't left the same king of life. [Consider: They left behind...]
Farooq left a life of poverty and ignorance.
(Then) Chanu believe that he left his traditions and all his culture.

Sherry

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Réponse: Correction/Life in GB de thomasermel, postée le 21-03-2016 à 21:39:08 (S | E)
Merci

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Réponse: Correction/Life in GB de thomasermel, postée le 21-03-2016 à 21:42:44 (S | E)
Farooq and Chanu have a very differente approach of life in Britain. For Farook Britain is the place where he became rich by importing food, where he found his family and where he finds respect and aknowlegment. Chanu believe that Britain is depraved he knows that people drink alcohol and go to nightclubs. To him they don't act properly.
Behind them they didn't leave the same kind of life. Farooq left a life of poverty and ignorance.
Contrary to Farooq Chanu believes that he left his traditions and all his culture.

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Réponse: Correction/Life in GB de gerondif, postée le 21-03-2016 à 23:14:22 (S | E)
Bonjour,
vous rajoutez des erreurs et ne corrigez pas celles que Sherry vous avait indiquées.
erreurs en bleu, corrections en vert.

Farooq and Chanu have a very differente approach of life in Britain. For Farook Britain is the place where he became rich by importing food, where he found (c'est le prétérit du verbe trouver ? to find, I found ? ou le verbe fonder, to found, auquel cas il faudrait le mettre au prétérit en ed) his family and where he finds respect and aknowlegment. Chanu believe (le s du présent simple!) that Britain is depraved. (Point + majuscule) he knows that people drink alcohol and go to nightclubs. To(pour lui) him they don't act properly.
Behind them (irait mieux en fin de phrase) they didn't leave the same kind of life. Farooq left a life of poverty and ignorance.
Contrary to (Unlike)Farooq,(virgule) Chanu believes that he left his traditions and all his culture.

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