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Message de chloe2998 posté le 02-01-2016 à 01:07:18 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pour la rentrée nous avions un dialogue à écrire et j'aimerais savoir s'il y a beaucoup de fautes.
Merci d'avances pour vos réponses.
Perso1 : Good morning
Perso2 : Good morning ! Can I help you ?
P1 : Yes, I would like to travel.
P2 : Ok, Which country would you like to visit ?
P1 : I don't know, this is a reason why I come.
P2 : Yes sure ... Have you got any preferencies ? For exemples : cold country or hot country ?
P1 : Um ... I prefer hot country because I would like sunbathing
P2 : Ok, do you want beach, mountain ... ?
P1 : Oh, beach it's cool !
P2 : What kind of activities would you like to make ? Have you got any idea ?
P1 : Yes, I like water-sking.
P2 : Um...ok...2min please, I look... we have Austalia, Tunisia, Mexico, Brazil ... But I would like to say more. So, where would you like to sleep ?
P1 : I prefer sleep in Hotel because I don't like camp and also I would visit a typical city, museum ... Something and I have already been to Brazil also I am hesitating between Tunisia and Mexico.
P2 : In Tunisia, there are many ancient sites as in Mexico, they both have the sea but in Tunisia they speak A rabic unlike in Mexico where Spanish is spoken.
P1 : Um... No... I don't know
P2 : If can it help you, mexico is more expensive than Tunisia.
P1 : Well we go in Tunisia.
P2 ; Good. How many people travel with you ?
P1 : We are 4 people. They are my husband, my two children and me.
P2 : Ok... For how long ?
P1 : I think about a fortnight.
P2 : So I book... You will leave by plane on July 5th at 2.20pm. Okay with you ?
P1 : Yes, sure. What must prevail as clothes ?
P2 : I advice rather light clothes, sunscreen, sunglasses, a swimmsuit and especially not forget a hat because the sun is hard.
P1 ; Very Good. It is noted. How much you should ?
P2 : The total price amounts to 386$
P1 : Ok here, Goodbye
P2 : Goodbye, have a nice Journey
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Modifié par lucile83 le 02-01-2016 07:25
Message de chloe2998 posté le 02-01-2016 à 01:07:18 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pour la rentrée nous avions un dialogue à écrire et j'aimerais savoir s'il y a beaucoup de fautes.
Merci d'avances pour vos réponses.
Perso1 : Good morning
Perso2 : Good morning ! Can I help you ?
P1 : Yes, I would like to travel.
P2 : Ok, Which country would you like to visit ?
P1 : I don't know, this is a reason why I come.
P2 : Yes sure ... Have you got any preferencies ? For exemples : cold country or hot country ?
P1 : Um ... I prefer hot country because I would like sunbathing
P2 : Ok, do you want beach, mountain ... ?
P1 : Oh, beach it's cool !
P2 : What kind of activities would you like to make ? Have you got any idea ?
P1 : Yes, I like water-sking.
P2 : Um...ok...2min please, I look... we have Austalia, Tunisia, Mexico, Brazil ... But I would like to say more. So, where would you like to sleep ?
P1 : I prefer sleep in Hotel because I don't like camp and also I would visit a typical city, museum ... Something and I have already been to Brazil also I am hesitating between Tunisia and Mexico.
P2 : In Tunisia, there are many ancient sites as in Mexico, they both have the sea but in Tunisia they speak A rabic unlike in Mexico where Spanish is spoken.
P1 : Um... No... I don't know
P2 : If can it help you, mexico is more expensive than Tunisia.
P1 : Well we go in Tunisia.
P2 ; Good. How many people travel with you ?
P1 : We are 4 people. They are my husband, my two children and me.
P2 : Ok... For how long ?
P1 : I think about a fortnight.
P2 : So I book... You will leave by plane on July 5th at 2.20pm. Okay with you ?
P1 : Yes, sure. What must prevail as clothes ?
P2 : I advice rather light clothes, sunscreen, sunglasses, a swimmsuit and especially not forget a hat because the sun is hard.
P1 ; Very Good. It is noted. How much you should ?
P2 : The total price amounts to 386$
P1 : Ok here, Goodbye
P2 : Goodbye, have a nice Journey
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Modifié par lucile83 le 02-01-2016 07:25
Réponse: Dialogue/correction de karimmarshall, postée le 02-01-2016 à 03:01:32 (S | E)
premièrement je pense que tu as fait une faute de frappe mais tu as écrit arabic avec un espace.
Puis je te donne des améliorations; en anglais on aime simplifier je vois que tu utilises souvent " would " tu pourrais l’écrire comme ça " I'd, I'd like to travel with my family " et cette phrase tu pourrais la tourner autrement " I don't know, this is a reason why I come. " tu pourrais dire " Well I don't know, can you advise me please " simple supposition. ensuite cette phrase " So I Book.. " to my point elle me semble un peu ambiguë tu pourrais dire " Let me see " dernière chose " How much you should ? " cela ce ne se dit pas on dit " How much does it cost " sinon le reste est très bien; quelques erreurs mais tu as un bon niveau.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 02-01-2016 07:17
des fautes dans la correction...Réponse: Dialogue/correction de chloe2998, postée le 02-01-2016 à 13:06:35 (S | E)
Merci de ton aide
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