Correction/lettre motivation

Correction/lettre motivation
Message de kevin0208 posté le 28-10-2015 à 23:06:36 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Je suis en train d'écrire ma lettre de motivation en anglais (le casse-tête )
J'aurais besoin de votre aide pour corriger un paragraphe dont je ne suis vraiment pas sûr (surtout au niveau de la syntaxe mais si vous trouvez d'autres fautes n'hésitez pas!)
"I recently graduated with a Master’s Degree in Tourism Management where I had the opportunity to develop strong leadership and managerial skills, excellent communication abilities as well as commercial capability to optimize sales, control costs and build customer loyalty, which will be of use in this position."
Merci d'avance!
Bonne soirée,
Kevin

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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-10-2015 23:11

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Réponse: Correction/lettre motivation de kevin0208, postée le 28-10-2015 à 23:27:50 (S | E)
Désolé mais je viens de rajouter une phrase à la fin du paragraphe

"I recently graduated with a Master’s Degree in Tourism Management where I had the opportunity to develop strong leadership and managerial skills, excellent communication abilities as well as commercial capability to optimize sales, control costs and build customer loyalty, which will be of use in this position. I have already had the opportunity to apply them while working as Front office Management Trainee with (name of company 1) then (name of company 2)."


Merci

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