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Message de morizot posté le 09-12-2014 à 20:40:34 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je suis en train d'écrire un bref résumé professionel et j'aimerais être sûr qu'aucune faute ne persiste.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Cordialement
I discovered Purchasing and Supply Chain management during my second year of DUT. We had a little introduction in our program to discover the main departments of a company. It was a relevation for me, and from that day I have decided to orientate my studies over those disciplines. Thus, I continued my cursus with a bachelor's degree in Industrial management and Logistics, and I finally specialized myself in International Purchasing.
For me, this profession is a perfect mix between all the company's sectors. You need great analytic skills, you have to be confortable with numbers and able to extract operational strategies from them. You also have to be a great negotiator and know about intercultural aspects of the supplier you are dealing with. Personnal quality as organization, rigor or empathy are also needed to be an efficient purchaser and understand the job in its globality.
My ambition is to work in a volatile environment which requires agility and problem-solving capacity. I wish to explore all the opportunities offered by this profession and improve my expertise throughtout my career. Intercultural aspect also matters to me and I am eargely awaiting to meet international interlocutors and discover new ways of thinking.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-12-2014 22:57
Message de morizot posté le 09-12-2014 à 20:40:34 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je suis en train d'écrire un bref résumé professionel et j'aimerais être sûr qu'aucune faute ne persiste.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Cordialement
I discovered Purchasing and Supply Chain management during my second year of DUT. We had a little introduction in our program to discover the main departments of a company. It was a relevation for me, and from that day I have decided to orientate my studies over those disciplines. Thus, I continued my cursus with a bachelor's degree in Industrial management and Logistics, and I finally specialized myself in International Purchasing.
For me, this profession is a perfect mix between all the company's sectors. You need great analytic skills, you have to be confortable with numbers and able to extract operational strategies from them. You also have to be a great negotiator and know about intercultural aspects of the supplier you are dealing with. Personnal quality as organization, rigor or empathy are also needed to be an efficient purchaser and understand the job in its globality.
My ambition is to work in a volatile environment which requires agility and problem-solving capacity. I wish to explore all the opportunities offered by this profession and improve my expertise throughtout my career. Intercultural aspect also matters to me and I am eargely awaiting to meet international interlocutors and discover new ways of thinking.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-12-2014 22:57
Réponse: Relecture/Résumé professionnel de gerondif, postée le 10-12-2014 à 17:45:32 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
quelques pistes de correction bien que je ne sois pas un spécialiste de ce jargon,certaines tournures de phrase semblant être du français traduit.
I discovered Purchasing and Supply Chain management during my second year of DUT. We had a little introduction in our program to discover the main departments of a company. It was a relevation (revelation)for me, and from that day I have decided (je mettrais un prétérit puisque vous datez l'action) to orientate my studies over those disciplines. Thus (très littéraire), I continued my cursus with a bachelor's degree in Industrial management and Logistics, and I finally specialized
For me, this profession is a perfect mix between (un mélange de, pas un mélange entre)all the company's sectors. You need great analytic (analytical?) skills, you have to be confortable with numbers and able to extract operational strategies from them. You also have to be a great negotiator and know about the intercultural aspects of the supplier you are dealing with (ils sont définis ces aspects, donc the). Personnal quality as organization (ne veut rien dire, le as doit être faux "une qualité personnelle en tant qu'organisation???"), rigor or empathy are also needed to be an efficient purchaser and understand the job in its globality.
My ambition is to work in a volatile environment which requires agility and problem-solving capacity. I wish to explore all the opportunities offered by this profession and improve my expertise throughtout my career. Intercultural aspect*(pluriel ou alors singulier avec the devant)) also matters to me and I am eargely awaiting (to await est pour moi très littéraire et suranné: I really /eagerly//look forward to meeting.... irait mieux) to meet international interlocutors and discover new ways of thinking.
Réponse: Relecture/Résumé professionnel de morizot, postée le 11-12-2014 à 09:25:12 (S | E)
Bonjour gérondif,
Merci pour ton aide.
En effet, je ne suis pas un spécialiste de l'anglais très littéraire qu'on utilise dans le cadre des CV notamment, et il m'a parfois été difficile d'exprimer une phrase ou une tournure sans passer au préalable par le francais.
Cordialement
Réponse: Relecture/Résumé professionnel de messaoud, postée le 11-12-2014 à 10:05:01 (S | E)
Hello
I wish to explore all the opportunities offered by this profession and improve my expertise throughtout my career.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 11-12-2014 10:26
On ne corrige pas, on indique les fautes, merci.
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