Aide/Athletes

Aide/Athletes
Message de llouna59 posté le 07-10-2014 à 16:11:51 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous.
Je dois rendre un devoir pour la semaine prochaine. Ce devoir porte sur un article du Time " China's Disposable Athletes".
Je dois donc donner mon avis sur cet article. Voici ce que j'ai rédigé, pourriez-vous corriger les fautes de grammaire et de syntaxe.
Je vous remercie d'avance pour votre aide.
Louna.

I think that China’s an immense medal factory. Indeed, in China, athletes are so young and endure brutal training. There are so much school in China recruiting thousands of very young children as Zou Chunlan and sending elites to the country’s Olympic machine. I think definitely that kids were being abused. Government remains blind to this problem knowing that the glory of the state trumps all. This article explains that when these athletes retire, are confronted by an unemployed because haven’t graduated from high school. So, I think the government funding assisted young athletes to allowing study and forbidding their trainers to take steroids. Since 2003, they change and reinforced by a new law that shifted most responsibility for employment. I think that this law will improve the life of the. I would suggest to the China government that it do what other countries do, like it France, when, Nicolas Sarkozy committed the Olympic committee to the fact that the top athletes can value their years of sports investment in the calculation of their retirement credits.

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Réponse: Aide/Athletes de hushpuppy, postée le 09-10-2014 à 04:36:01 (S | E)
Bonjour,

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