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Message de korimizu posté le 02-06-2014 à 16:53:36 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pourriez-vous corriger la biographie de Tennessee Williams faite par moi-même s'il vous plaît ? Ce serait très aimable.
Merci d'avance !
Tennessee Williams for Dummies
Hello young apple(jeune pomme),this page will be devoted to Tennessee Williams ! This famous playwright..What,you don't know who he is ?! Oh yes..''for Dummies'',so you will become a genius in 30 minutes chrono !
I/ Williams' privacy
We will enter in his privacy .. Have you any idea what he is ?
Thomas Lanier Williams(his real name) was born on March 26th 1911,in Columbus,in the Mississipi (The Magnolia state) so he was American.
He lived with his mother Edwina(she didn't work),his sister Rose and his maternal grandparents.His father was a traveling salesman(Thomas didn't like him),often absent and the worst is that he is a poker player and an alcoholic.
He began to take an interest in literature and began to write poems and sketches at the age of 5 years(He had a serious illness).
In 1928, Tennessee tripped to Europe with her grandfather and he will have three revelations :
_He discovered he was gay
_He had an intellectual revelation, which reinforced the idea of becoming an actor
_He had a spiritual revelation.
2/From darkness to light
Before becoming famous, we all know it's hard. The question,how was Tennessee before his celebrity and how he became famous.
Yes,it is Williams.
Before 1941,he did a lot of job(barman,doorman...),but the night,he devoted his time to write short dramas.In 1941,there was Pearl Harbor's attack and the USA went to war(Tennessee was 30).But he couldn't participate in the war because the U.S army didn't want a gay,alcoholic with a psychic fragility, heart and nervous.
He decided to go to Hollywood , where he worked at the ''Metro Goldwyn Mayer'',but he didn't like that and he returned at New-York.There, it will make a very famous drama : The glass menagerie.
Then,he continued to write plays(Summer and smoke,Kingdom of Earth...) and one of which will become the most famous of all his dramas : A Streetcar Named Desire .
III/ a Streetcar Named Desire's summary .
Blanche dubois visits her sister , Stella, who lives in a popular area of New Orlean. She is married with Stanley Kowalsky, an impulsive and handsome man, loving drink and play. Stella is deprecated by her sister about the fact she is in love with an poker addict. The worst thing is, Stella has lost the family home of
"beautiful dream".
Stanley is upset, because his wife has squandered her family legacy and he discovers his past of fired teacher for corruption of minors.
blanche's mental health will be affected by the end of her youth love.she will be tormented by people's look because she isn't what she want to be...
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Modifié par lucile83 le 02-06-2014 19:19
Message de korimizu posté le 02-06-2014 à 16:53:36 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pourriez-vous corriger la biographie de Tennessee Williams faite par moi-même s'il vous plaît ? Ce serait très aimable.
Merci d'avance !
Tennessee Williams for Dummies
Hello young apple(jeune pomme),this page will be devoted to Tennessee Williams ! This famous playwright..What,you don't know who he is ?! Oh yes..''for Dummies'',so you will become a genius in 30 minutes chrono !
I/ Williams' privacy
We will enter in his privacy .. Have you any idea what he is ?
Thomas Lanier Williams(his real name) was born on March 26th 1911,in Columbus,in the Mississipi (The Magnolia state) so he was American.
He lived with his mother Edwina(she didn't work),his sister Rose and his maternal grandparents.His father was a traveling salesman(Thomas didn't like him),often absent and the worst is that he is a poker player and an alcoholic.
He began to take an interest in literature and began to write poems and sketches at the age of 5 years(He had a serious illness).
In 1928, Tennessee tripped to Europe with her grandfather and he will have three revelations :
_He discovered he was gay
_He had an intellectual revelation, which reinforced the idea of becoming an actor
_He had a spiritual revelation.
2/From darkness to light
Before becoming famous, we all know it's hard. The question,how was Tennessee before his celebrity and how he became famous.
Yes,it is Williams.
Before 1941,he did a lot of job(barman,doorman...),but the night,he devoted his time to write short dramas.In 1941,there was Pearl Harbor's attack and the USA went to war(Tennessee was 30).But he couldn't participate in the war because the U.S army didn't want a gay,alcoholic with a psychic fragility, heart and nervous.
He decided to go to Hollywood , where he worked at the ''Metro Goldwyn Mayer'',but he didn't like that and he returned at New-York.There, it will make a very famous drama : The glass menagerie.
Then,he continued to write plays(Summer and smoke,Kingdom of Earth...) and one of which will become the most famous of all his dramas : A Streetcar Named Desire .
III/ a Streetcar Named Desire's summary .
Blanche dubois visits her sister , Stella, who lives in a popular area of New Orlean. She is married with Stanley Kowalsky, an impulsive and handsome man, loving drink and play. Stella is deprecated by her sister about the fact she is in love with an poker addict. The worst thing is, Stella has lost the family home of
"beautiful dream".
Stanley is upset, because his wife has squandered her family legacy and he discovers his past of fired teacher for corruption of minors.
blanche's mental health will be affected by the end of her youth love.she will be tormented by people's look because she isn't what she want to be...
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Modifié par lucile83 le 02-06-2014 19:19
Réponse: Tennessee Williams/correction de korimizu, postée le 03-06-2014 à 17:36:22 (S | E)
Y'aurait-il quelqu'un?Réponse: Tennessee Williams/correction de gerondif, postée le 03-06-2014 à 23:17:38 (S | E)
Hello, young apple,
Soyez plus précis dans vos possessifs, vos conjugaisons et vos concordances de temps pour ne pas tomber sur des pépins.
erreurs en bleu (ou rose si je vois rouge)
corrections en vert
Tennessee Williams for Dummies
Hello young apple(jeune pomme),this page will be devoted to Tennessee Williams ! This famous playwright..What,you don't know who he is ?! Oh yes..''for Dummies'',so you will become a genius in 30 minutes chrono (sounds French)!
I/ Williams' privacy
We will enter in his privacy .. Have you (soit do you have, soit have you got mais have you est rare et sonne faux même si on l'entend en GB) any idea what he is (was irait mieux) ?
Thomas Lanier Williams(his real name) was born on March 26th 1911,in Columbus,in the Mississipi (The Magnolia state) so he was American.
He lived with his mother Edwina(she didn't work (phrase un peu machiste, she was a housewife, she didn't have a job...)),his sister Rose and his maternal grandparents.His father was a traveling salesman(Thomas didn't like him),often absent and the worst is that he is(prétérit) a poker player and an alcoholic.
He began to take an interest in literature and began to write poems and sketches at the age of 5 years(He had a serious illness).
In 1928, Tennessee tripped (pour moi, to trip, c'est trébucher) to Europe with her(à elle??) grandfather and he will have (que vient faire ce futur ici?)three revelations :
_He discovered he was gay
_He had an intellectual revelation, which reinforced the(his) idea of becoming an actor
_He had a spiritual revelation.
2/From darkness to light
Before becoming famous, we all know it's hard. The question is ,how was Tennessee before his celebrity and how he became (forem interrogative svp, auxiliaire sujet verbe)famous.
Yes,it is Williams.
Before 1941,he did a lot of job(pluriel)(barman,doorman...),but the night,he devoted his time to write(gérondif) short dramas.In 1941,there was (correct mais maladroit)Pearl Harbor's attack and the USA went to war(Tennessee was 30).But he couldn't participate in the war because the U.S army didn't want a gay,alcoholic (sont des adjectifs, donc il faut rajouter man)with a psychic fragility, heart(que fait ce nom tout seul perdu entre deux virgules?) and nervous.
He decided to go to Hollywood , where he worked at the ''Metro Goldwyn Mayer'',but he didn't like that and he returned at(préposition de mouvement après returend) New-York.There, it(qui est ce it ?) will make (que vient faire ce futur ici ?) a very famous drama : The glass menagerie(majuscules à un titre!!).
Then,he continued to write plays(Summer and smoke,Kingdom of Earth...) and one of which will become (que vient faire ce futur après un temps du passé? une de ces pièces allait devenir un succès mondial...)the most famous of all his dramas : A Streetcar Named Desire .
III/ a Streetcar Named Desire's summary .
Blanche dubois visits her sister , Stella, who lives in a popular area of New Orleans. She is married with(to) Stanley Kowalsky, an impulsive and handsome man, loving drink and play(quel sens? money games,card games? gambling?). Stella is deprecated by her sister about the fact she is in love with an poker addict. The worst thing is, Stella has lost the family home of
"beautiful dream".
Stanley is upset, because his wife has squandered her family legacy and he discovers his(son passé à lui ou à elle?) past of fired teacher for corruption of minors.
Blanche's mental health will be affected by the end of her youth love(sonne faux, ce youth, je trouve youthful dans le dictionnaire en ligne, ou first love,).she will be tormented by people's look (by the way people look at her) because she isn't what she wants to be...
(la fin paraît un peu bâclée, non? ou ce n'est pas fini?)
(mais, ceci dit, à 14 ans, ce n'est pas mal quand même!
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