Correction / Pastry club

Correction / Pastry club
Message de physa posté le 18-11-2013 à 23:39:04 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,

Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger ce texte s'il vous plait :

This club is a Pastry Club.It´s a place to relax, meet new friends but in particular : A place to Cook a lot of cakes,learn new recipes and develop your pastry skills. It is open to all pupils aged from 12 to 16 years old.Meetings are here after school Tuesdays 4:30 to 6:00 and Fridays 5:30 to 7:00. The adress of the Club is 520 Murray Street in New York. One pastry chef is present to help and gives advices.

Merci pour vos réponses.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-11-2013 08:21

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Réponse: Correction / Pastry club de hinot49, postée le 19-11-2013 à 06:15:30 (S | E)
Bonjour Physa ,

A mon avis concernant la dernière phrase le verbe "gives" est à l' infinitif ,
ça devient help and give advices .
Bonne journée .

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Réponse: Correction / Pastry club de lucile83, postée le 19-11-2013 à 08:28:03 (S | E)
Hello,

Les fautes sont en bleu

This club is a Pastry Club. It´s a place to relax, meet new friends but in particular : A place to Cook a lot of cakes,learn new recipes and develop your pastry skills. It is open to all pupils aged from 12 to 16 years old. Meetings are here after school ... Tuesdays ... 4:30 to 6:00 and ... Fridays ... 5:30 to 7:00. The adress of the Club is 520 Murray Street in New York. One pastry chef is present to help and gives advices.

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Réponse: Correction / Pastry club de gerondif, postée le 19-11-2013 à 08:28:44 (S | E)
Hello,
advice est un mot collectif, pas de pluriel, pas de s.
This club is a Pastry Club.It´s a place to relax, meet new friends but in particular,a place to cook a lot of cakes,learn new recipes and develop your(maladroit) pastry skills. It is open to all pupils aged from 12 to 16 years old.Meetings are (take place) here after school (manque une préposition, deux lettres, commençant par o)Tuesdays from 4:30 to 6:00 and ** Fridays from 5:30 to 7:00. The adress of the Club is 520 Murray Street in New York. One pastry chef is present to help and gives advices.

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Réponse: Correction / Pastry club de sherry48, postée le 19-11-2013 à 21:41:54 (S | E)
Hello.
You have already gotten good corrections, but I have one additional suggestion. To be precise, you bake cakes rather than cook them.
Sherry

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Réponse: Correction / Pastry club de physa, postée le 19-11-2013 à 22:52:05 (S | E)
Merci à tous de vos réponses, en fait la prof m'a tout corrigé ._.
Desolé encore et merci!!

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