Lettre motivation/aide

Lettre motivation/aide
Message de sousouch posté le 01-07-2013 à 19:16:16 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,

j'ai besoin d'aide au sujet d'une lettre de motivation que je dois écrire pour pouvoir entrer en section europeenne au lycée . Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger mes erreurs ? Vous pouvez aussi m'aider à reformuler quelques phrases...
Merci d'avance !

Dear madam,
I am writing you this cover letter in order to demonstrate my movitation and my determination to join the European section of my high school next year.
I want to improve my capacities in English .
This section is a nice way to learn about the anglophone countries culture and history.
In my opinion speaking this language fluently is really important . It's a real advantage for my future career, travel and everyday life .
I know that this section would give me more work but I'm a serious and motivated student .
For me, it would be an honor to integrate this english section .
Hoping a positive response, thank you very much for your time and attention .

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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-07-2013 21:18

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Réponse: Lettre motivation/aide de gnanga, postée le 04-07-2013 à 12:22:16 (S | E)
Hello sousouch,

some errors in blue and suggestions in green:

Dear madam,
I am writing to you this cover letter in order to demonstrate my movitation and my determination (too heavy) to join about the entrance in your high school, the European English Section next year.
I would like to improve my capacities in English .
This section is a great way to learn about the anglophone countries culture and history.
In my opinion speaking this English language fluently is really important . It's a real advantage for my future career, travel and everyday life .
I know that this section would give me more work but I'm a serious and motivated student .
For me, it would be an honor to integrate this English section .
Hoping a positive response (another twist), thank you very much for your taking the time and attention to listen to me .


Good luck.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 04-07-2013 13:06

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Réponse: Lettre motivation/aide de sousouch, postée le 04-07-2013 à 18:50:55 (S | E)
Hello

Thank you very much for your help !

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