Aide/lettre motivation

Or après m'être relu je pense qu'il y a encore des erreurs de grammaire / d'orthographe...
Si une âme charitable pouvait la lire et m'aider, ça serait super sympa
La voici :

Subject: apply for the global tech Track.

Dear Mr xxx
I am writing to inform you that I am really interested in the global tech track. Indeed, I think it is the best way for me to reach my career objective.
The program is oriented over the technology management and the innovation, and I am attracted by this domain. To be more precise, my goal is to become a web manager, and the global tech track will allow me to get a global knowledge package to be more efficient in this domain. Therefore, I will be more prepared to success after my studies in what I want to do. Moreover, the program is taught in English and it will allow me to improve my level. A good English level is essential in the professional life, especially in the web management domain.
I have been attracted by technology since I had touched my first computer at the age of 13. When I was 14, I decided to learn how to create a website by my own, and then I started to create some website for pleasure (visit www.xxxxx.fr). I am also attracted by technology and how to use it in companies in order to improve its efficiency. Technology is everywhere now, and it is growing so fast that manager who will be able to understand the ins and outs of that development will be sought after.
I have the ability to work within a team, and I am patient and curious. Furthermore, I am determined in succeeding in my studies and I am ready to make the best of myself in this program. My enthusiasm and my creativity will help me to achieve my aim.
I deeply thank you for the attention you will carry in my application, and I hope to meet you soon for an interview.
Yours sincerely,
xxx
Student in first year.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-12-2012 22:32