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Message from san99 posted on 16-06-2012 at 01:51:07 (D | E | F)
Hello,
I am pasting my exercise in which I have combined sentences using participles and nominative absolute constructions.
Could you please check the sentences for reconstructions and accuracy?
Thank you for your help.
He jumped out of the window. He left the room.
Jumping out of the window he left the room.
He hurt his foot. He stopped.
Having hurt his foot he stopped.
The thief had been in prison before. He received several sentences.
The thief having been in prison before received several sentences.
He was unwilling to go any further. He returned home.
Being unwilling to go any further he returned home.
They saw the uselessness of the violence. They changed their plan.
Having seen the uselessness of the violent they changed their plan.
He was weary of the failure. He emigrated to Africa.
Being wearing of the failure he emigrated to Africa.
The king was warned of danger. He made a good escape.
The king having been warned of danger made a good escape.
He lost a large sum of money. He gave up speculation.
Having lost a large sum of money he have up speculation.
I received no answer. I knocked on the door a second time.
Receiving no answer I knocked on the door a second time.
His wife encouraged him. He persevered.
Having encouraged by his wife he persevered.
He gave up his situation. He was not satisfied with his salary.
Not having been satisfied with his salary he gave up situation.
He felt tired. He laid his work aside.
Having felt tired he laid his work aside or being tired he laid his work aside.
He went straight on. He saw Hari on the path.
Having gone straight on he saw Hari on the part ( I am not sure).
The stable door was opened. The horses were stolen.
The stable door having been opened the horses were stolen.
The hunter took his gun. He went out to shoot the lion.
Taking his gun the hunter went out to shoot the lion.
I went to Mumbai last year. I wished to see a dentist.
Having gone to Mumbai last year I wished to see a dentist.
Having been to Mumbai last year I wished to see a dentist.
A crow stole a piece of cheese. She flew to her nest to enjoy the nice meal.
Having stolen a piece of cheese a crow flew to her nest to enjoy the nice meal.
The magician took pity on the mouse. He turned it into a cat.
The magician having taken pity on the mouse turned it into a cat.
A passenger alighted from the train. He fell over a bag on the platform.
A passenger having alighted from the train fell over a bag on the platform.
My sister was charmed with the silk. She bought ten yards.
My sister having been charmed with the silk bought ten yards.
I did not hear his answer. It was spoken quietly.
Being spoken quietly I could not hear his answer.
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Edited by lucile83 on 16-06-2012 08:54
Message from san99 posted on 16-06-2012 at 01:51:07 (D | E | F)
Hello,
I am pasting my exercise in which I have combined sentences using participles and nominative absolute constructions.
Could you please check the sentences for reconstructions and accuracy?
Thank you for your help.
He jumped out of the window. He left the room.
Jumping out of the window he left the room.
He hurt his foot. He stopped.
Having hurt his foot he stopped.
The thief had been in prison before. He received several sentences.
The thief having been in prison before received several sentences.
He was unwilling to go any further. He returned home.
Being unwilling to go any further he returned home.
They saw the uselessness of the violence. They changed their plan.
Having seen the uselessness of the violent they changed their plan.
He was weary of the failure. He emigrated to Africa.
Being wearing of the failure he emigrated to Africa.
The king was warned of danger. He made a good escape.
The king having been warned of danger made a good escape.
He lost a large sum of money. He gave up speculation.
Having lost a large sum of money he have up speculation.
I received no answer. I knocked on the door a second time.
Receiving no answer I knocked on the door a second time.
His wife encouraged him. He persevered.
Having encouraged by his wife he persevered.
He gave up his situation. He was not satisfied with his salary.
Not having been satisfied with his salary he gave up situation.
He felt tired. He laid his work aside.
Having felt tired he laid his work aside or being tired he laid his work aside.
He went straight on. He saw Hari on the path.
Having gone straight on he saw Hari on the part ( I am not sure).
The stable door was opened. The horses were stolen.
The stable door having been opened the horses were stolen.
The hunter took his gun. He went out to shoot the lion.
Taking his gun the hunter went out to shoot the lion.
I went to Mumbai last year. I wished to see a dentist.
Having gone to Mumbai last year I wished to see a dentist.
Having been to Mumbai last year I wished to see a dentist.
A crow stole a piece of cheese. She flew to her nest to enjoy the nice meal.
Having stolen a piece of cheese a crow flew to her nest to enjoy the nice meal.
The magician took pity on the mouse. He turned it into a cat.
The magician having taken pity on the mouse turned it into a cat.
A passenger alighted from the train. He fell over a bag on the platform.
A passenger having alighted from the train fell over a bag on the platform.
My sister was charmed with the silk. She bought ten yards.
My sister having been charmed with the silk bought ten yards.
I did not hear his answer. It was spoken quietly.
Being spoken quietly I could not hear his answer.
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Edited by lucile83 on 16-06-2012 08:54
Re: Synthesis/sentences from gerondif, posted on 16-06-2012 at 12:07:21 (D | E)
Hello,
in your exercise, you transform normal sentences into rather clumsy ones.
He jumped out of the window. He left the room.
Jumping out of the window he left the room. /He left the room by jumping out of the window.
He hurt his foot. He stopped.
Having hurt his foot, he stopped. He stopped after hurting his foot.
The thief had been in prison before. He received several sentences.
The thief having been in prison before received several sentences.(ok but rather heavy)
The thief received several sentences for been (having been) in prison before)
He was unwilling to go any further. He returned home.
They saw the uselessness of the violence. They changed their plan.
Having seen (clumsy)the uselessness of the violent they changed their plan.
They changed their plan after seeing the uselessness of violence.
He was weary of the failure. He emigrated to Africa.
The king was warned of danger. He made a good escape.
The king having been warned of danger made a good escape.
He lost a large sum of money. He gave up speculation.
Having lost a large sum of money, he gave up speculation (after losing...).
I received no answer. I knocked on the door a second time.
Receiving no answer, I knocked on the door a second time.
His wife encouraged him. He persevered.
Having ****** encouraged by his wife, he persevered.
He gave up his situation. He was not satisfied with his salary.
Not having been (clumsy, not being satisfied, and "unsatisfied with" would be much lighter) satisfied with his salary he gave up his situation.
He felt tired. He laid his work aside.
Having felt tired he laid his work aside or being tired he laid his work aside.
He went straight on. He saw Hari on the path.
Having gone ( after going) straight on he saw Hari on the path ( I am not sure).
The stable door was opened. The horses were stolen.
The stable door having been opened, the horses were stolen.
(The horses were stolen because of the stable door being left open)
The hunter took his gun. He went out to shoot the lion.
Taking his gun, the hunter went out to shoot the lion.
I went to Mumbai last year(because) I wished to see a dentist.
Having gone to Mumbai last year I wished to see a dentist.
Having been to Mumbai last year I wished to see a dentist.
He has gone to America: so he is absent, he is not with you.
He has been to America: but he is back here now with you.
A crow stole a piece of cheese. She flew to her nest to enjoy the nice meal.
(after stealing) Having stolen a piece of cheese, a crow flew to her nest to enjoy the nice meal.
The magician took pity on the mouse. He turned it into a cat.
The magician having taken pity on the mouse turned it into a cat.
A passenger alighted (not a common verb, to get off) from the train. He fell over a bag on the platform.
A passenger having alighted from the train fell over a bag on the platform.
My sister was charmed with the silk. She bought ten yards.
My sister having been charmed with the silk bought ten yards.
I did not hear his answer. It was spoken quietly.
Being spoken quietly I could not hear his answer.(complicated pattern! you could think that being spoken quietly applies to "I")
I could not hear his softly spoken answer.
The problem that you could stumble on is the folllowing one:
He had stolen some money. He was arrested; becomes:
He was arrested for stealing some money. And here stealing means "having stolen" which is more awkward
Thanks for helping me means: I thank you because you have helped me.
Re: Synthesis/sentences from sherry48, posted on 16-06-2012 at 14:37:02 (D | E)
Hello.
I agree with gerondif; many of these sentences have now become clumsy. The comment at the end says it all: (A)complicated pattern! you could think that being spoken quietly applies to "I". When there is a noun or pronoun before the verb, as in that case, the sentence is awkward. I selected a few sentences that still seemed that way to me. The subject should be placed before the verb.
The king was warned of danger. He made a good escape.
The king having been warned of danger made a good escape.
Having been...
The stable door was opened. The horses were stolen.
The stable door having been opened, the horses were stolen.
Since the stable door....
I went to Mumbai last year. I wished to see a dentist.
Having gone to Mumbai last year I wished to see a dentist.
Having been to Mumbai last year I wished to see a dentist.
(I understood this one to mean that the reason for going was to see the dentist, therefore...)
Wishing....
He has gone to America: so he is absent
He has been to America: but he is back here now.
Having gone...
The magician took pity on the mouse. He turned it into a cat.
The magician having taken pity on the mouse turned it into a cat
Taking pity...
A passenger alighted (not a common verb, to get off) from the train. He fell over a bag on the platform.
A passenger having alighted from the train fell over a bag on the platform.
Alighting from...
My sister was charmed with the silk. She bought ten yards.
My sister having been charmed with the silk bought ten yards.
Being charmed...
Finish these sentences and see if they don't flow more naturally now. Sherry
Re: Synthesis/sentences from san99, posted on 16-06-2012 at 20:23:12 (D | E)
Thank you all for posting comments on this thread and helping me. I had mentioned before that all these sentences needed to be constructed using past participles and nominative construction. I have a grammar book from where I took all these sentences and solved on the forum. I was myself confused with some sentences that is why I posted the solution here. I could have used prepositions and infinitives if the author hadn't put a condition there.
Re: Synthesis/sentences from san99, posted on 16-06-2012 at 20:38:57 (D | E)
Hello Gerondif,
I would like to thank you for highlighting the mistakes in the content. I want to ask few questions, which are given below.
He jumped out of the window. He left the room.
Jumping out of the window he left the room. /He left the room by jumping out of the window.
He hurt his foot. He stopped.
Having hurt his foot, he stopped. He stopped after hurting his foot.
The thief had been in prison before. He received several sentences.
The thief having been in prison before received several sentences.(ok but rather heavy) I just wanted to make a sense with the sentence, it's heavy I know but is readable.
The thief received several sentences for been (having been) in prison before)(It's almost the same with omission of having.)
He was unwilling to go any further. He returned home.
Being(useless) unwilling to go any further, he returned home. Yeah.
They saw the uselessness of the violence. They changed their plan.
Having seen (clumsy)the uselessness of the violent they changed their plan.
They changed their plan after seeing the uselessness of violence. ( The sentence had to be rewritten using the past particle not with the preposition.)
He was weary of the failure. He emigrated to Africa.
The king was warned of danger. He made a good escape.
The king having been warned of danger made a good escape.
He lost a large sum of money. He gave up speculation.
Having lost a large sum of money, he gave up speculation (after losing...). ( Is there any way to complete the sentence without preposition?)
I received no answer. I knocked on the door a second time.
Receiving no answer, I knocked on the door a second time.
His wife encouraged him. He persevered.
Having ****** encouraged by his wife, he persevered.
Having been encouraged by his wife, he preserved?? Does this make any sense?
He gave up his situation. He was not satisfied with his salary.
Not having been (clumsy, not being satisfied, and "unsatisfied with" would be much lighter) satisfied with his salary he gave up his situation.
He felt tired. He laid his work aside.
Having felt tired he laid his work aside or being tired he laid his work aside.
He went straight on. He saw Hari on the path.
Having gone ( after going) straight on he saw Hari on the path ( I am not sure).
The stable door was opened. The horses were stolen.
The stable door having been opened, the horses were stolen.
(The horses were stolen because of the stable door being left open)
The hunter took his gun. He went out to shoot the lion.
Taking his gun, the hunter went out to shoot the lion.
I went to Mumbai last year(because) I wished to see a dentist.
Having gone to Mumbai last year I wished to see a dentist.
Having been to Mumbai last year I wished to see a dentist.
He has gone to America: so he is absent, he is not with you.
He has been to America: but he is back here now with you.
A crow stole a piece of cheese. She flew to her nest to enjoy the nice meal.
(after stealing) Having stolen a piece of cheese, a crow flew to her nest to enjoy the nice meal.
The magician took pity on the mouse. He turned it into a cat.
The magician having taken pity on the mouse turned it into a cat.
A passenger alighted (not a common verb, to get off) from the train. He fell over a bag on the platform. ( It's in the exercise, I used it as it was)
A passenger having alighted from the train fell over a bag on the platform.
My sister was charmed with the silk. She bought ten yards.
My sister having been charmed with the silk bought ten yards.
I did not hear his answer. It was spoken quietly.
Being spoken quietly I could not hear his answer.(complicated pattern! you could think that being spoken quietly applies to "I")
I could not hear his softly spoken answer. ( OK, it is fine)
The problem that you could stumble on is the following one:
He had stolen some money. He was arrested; becomes:
He was arrested for stealing some money. And here stealing means "having stolen" which is more awkward ( Ok)
Thanks for helping me means: I thank you because you have helped me.( Thank you for helping me in advance and yeah you have also helped me before by posting answers to my other threads).
Re: Synthesis/sentences from notrepere, posted on 17-06-2012 at 00:09:45 (D | E)
HelloYou must also learn to punctuate sentences correctly. If you're going to put the participle clause after the main subject, you must use commas on either side of it. Also, if you start the sentence with the participle clause, you probably need a comma after it. This helps the reader understand your sentences:
Jumping out of the window, he left the room.
Having hurt his foot, he stopped.
The thief, having been in prison before, received several sentences.
or: Having been in prison before, the thief...
Having seen (clumsy)the uselessness of the violence, they changed their plan.
Being weary of his failure, he emigrated to Africa.
The king, having been warned of danger, made a good escape.
or: Having been warned of danger,
Being tired, he laid...
Having gone straight on, he saw Hari on the path.
(I prefer the present perfect here because it clearly shows the consequence of the present action)
Having gone to Mumbai last year, I wished to see a dentist.
The magician, having taken pity on the mouse, turned it into a cat.
or: Having taken pity...
You get the idea...
Re: Synthesis/sentences from san99, posted on 17-06-2012 at 01:41:18 (D | E)
ok, thanks for the tips. I will punctuate all sentences in the future, I still have exercises to complete.
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Edited by lucile83 on 17-06-2012 08:13
Re: Synthesis/sentences from gerondif, posted on 17-06-2012 at 14:30:52 (D | E)
Hello,
He was weary of the failure. He emigrated to Africa.
weary of his failure, he emigrated to Africa.
He lost a large sum of money. He gave up speculation.
Having lost a large sum of money, he gave up speculation is ok(after losing...). ( Is there any way to complete the sentence without preposition?)
His wife encouraged him. He persevered.
Having ****** encouraged by his wife, he persevered.
Having been encouraged by his wife, he persevered Does this make any sense? Yes
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