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[5ème] Descriprtion?
Message de thebestinthewor posté le 04-01-2012 à 16:12:31 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Pour demain je dois faire une description de ma chambre et j'aimerai avoir quelques avis sur mon travail:
Merci!
••MY ROOM••
My room is very very small and sometimes tidy, on my desk there are a lots of books beacuse I'm really inteligent , the back wall is red ; and the other is white... There is no radio, no CD player beaucause I hate music. But what I love the most is watching TV with my best friends; my old friends and my new friends. It's my favourite thing in the wolrd. But when I alone; my room is very boring... Too bad. I always make my bed, er.... and sometimes tidy my room. You know my room is the best room in the world, I really enjoy it... Well, above the bed there is a chest of drawers for all my clothes, and a huge carpet, there is a large beautiful bed.
Erm... My room is my real personality: I'm fun-loving, tidy, funny....
Well, er... that's it! As I said, my room is very pretty!
Message de thebestinthewor posté le 04-01-2012 à 16:12:31 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Pour demain je dois faire une description de ma chambre et j'aimerai avoir quelques avis sur mon travail:
Merci!
••MY ROOM••
My room is very very small and sometimes tidy, on my desk there are a lots of books beacuse I'm really inteligent , the back wall is red ; and the other is white... There is no radio, no CD player beaucause I hate music. But what I love the most is watching TV with my best friends; my old friends and my new friends. It's my favourite thing in the wolrd. But when I alone; my room is very boring... Too bad. I always make my bed, er.... and sometimes tidy my room. You know my room is the best room in the world, I really enjoy it... Well, above the bed there is a chest of drawers for all my clothes, and a huge carpet, there is a large beautiful bed.
Erm... My room is my real personality: I'm fun-loving, tidy, funny....
Well, er... that's it! As I said, my room is very pretty!
Réponse: [5ème] Descriprtion? de headway, postée le 04-01-2012 à 17:13:19 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voici un début de correction:
"••MY ROOM••
My room is very very small(Je remplacerais tout ça par 'tiny) and sometimes tidy,(Ici je mettrais un point)
on my desk there are a lots(a lot of/lots of) of books beacuse(orthographe) I'm really inteligent(clever/smart, irait mieux ici) , the back wall is red ; and the other one is white...
There is no radio, no CD player beaucause(orthographe) I hate music. But what I love the most is watching TV with my best friends; my old friends and my new friends. It's my favourite thing(mal dit) in the wolrd(orthographe). But when I (il manque le verbe) alone; my room is very boring(mal dit)... Too bad. I always make my bed, er.... and sometimes tidy my room. You know my room is the best room in the world, I really enjoy it... Well, above the bed there is a chest of drawers for all my clothes, and a huge carpet, there is a large beautiful bed.
Erm... My room is(trouvez un autre verbe) my real personality: I'm fun-loving, tidy, funny....
Well, er... that's it! As I said, my room is very pretty!"
Headway;
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