Cours gratuits > Forum > Thèmes généraux, jeux, chansons || En bas
Lettre de motivation/correction
Message de anneej posté le 29-03-2011 à 19:45:53 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous
Je dois finir mes candidatures pour xxx et je viens de finir ma lettre de motivation en anglais. N'étant pas bilingue, je voudrais savoir si quelqu'un aurait le courage de me la corriger d'ici demain (je dois tout poster demain midi), si cela est possible pour vous.
Merci par avance de votre gentillesse
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am now completing my last year of high school in economic and social sciences at the (name of my school) where I have made my whole schooling. I am also following the ... Preparation to political sciences. Through the school year, I have been able to gain an academic rigor and develop a great interest in contemporary issues and history. Therefore, I would love to pursue this learning in order to extend my knowledge. The History of Art is also one of my passions, and my multiple stays in Italy, more precisely Tuscany, enabled me to improve my culture in this field. I am very attracted to foreign languages as well, especially english, and my skills in that discipline ease me the access to foreign informations. Besides, a journey in England reinforced my love and my volition to learn about anglo-saxon civilizations.
Being determined to do international journalism, this History-English degree seems to fit perfectly my expectations and the many subjects given out promote an opening on the outside world, which looks essential to me.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon, and hoping for a favorable answer . Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully.
-------------------
Modifié par anneej le 29-03-2011 19:46
-------------------
Modifié par lucile83 le 29-03-2011 19:49
Message de anneej posté le 29-03-2011 à 19:45:53 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous
Je dois finir mes candidatures pour xxx et je viens de finir ma lettre de motivation en anglais. N'étant pas bilingue, je voudrais savoir si quelqu'un aurait le courage de me la corriger d'ici demain (je dois tout poster demain midi), si cela est possible pour vous.
Merci par avance de votre gentillesse
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am now completing my last year of high school in economic and social sciences at the (name of my school) where I have made my whole schooling. I am also following the ... Preparation to political sciences. Through the school year, I have been able to gain an academic rigor and develop a great interest in contemporary issues and history. Therefore, I would love to pursue this learning in order to extend my knowledge. The History of Art is also one of my passions, and my multiple stays in Italy, more precisely Tuscany, enabled me to improve my culture in this field. I am very attracted to foreign languages as well, especially english, and my skills in that discipline ease me the access to foreign informations. Besides, a journey in England reinforced my love and my volition to learn about anglo-saxon civilizations.
Being determined to do international journalism, this History-English degree seems to fit perfectly my expectations and the many subjects given out promote an opening on the outside world, which looks essential to me.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon, and hoping for a favorable answer . Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully.
-------------------
Modifié par anneej le 29-03-2011 19:46
-------------------
Modifié par lucile83 le 29-03-2011 19:49
Réponse: Lettre de motivation/correction de gerondif, postée le 29-03-2011 à 23:29:54 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Bon niveau !
Je ne suis pas un spécialiste en courrier, d'autres verront peut-être autre chose à améliorer mais le temps est compté !
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am now completing my last year of high school in economic and social sciences at the (name of my school) where I have made my whole schooling. I am also following the ... Preparation to political sciences. Through the school year, I have been able to gain an academic rigor and develop a great interest in contemporary issues and history. Therefore, I would love to pursue this learning in order to extend my knowledge. The History of Art is also one of my passions, and my multiple (numerous) stays in Italy, more precisely Tuscany, enabled me to improve my culture in this field. I am very attracted to foreign languages as well, especially English, and my skills in that discipline ease me the access to foreign informations(mot collectif)(my skills in that field make it easier for me to access foreign information/ to have access to foreign information). Besides, a journey in England reinforced my love and my volition(me semble rare my will, my wish, my strong will, my eagerness) to learn about anglo-saxon civilizations.
Being determined to do international journalism, this History-English degree seems to fit (ou directement fits) my expectations perfectly and the many subjects given out (available) promote an opening on the outside world, which looks essential to me.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon, and hoping for a favorable answer . Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully.
Réponse: Lettre de motivation/correction de anneej, postée le 29-03-2011 à 23:47:52 (S | E)
merci beaucoup d'avoir pris le temps de me corriger, c'est vraiment très gentil à vous!
je vais vite rectifier ces fautes! merci mille fois, vraiment
Réponse: Lettre de motivation/correction de notrepere, postée le 29-03-2011 à 23:53:43 (S | E)
BonjourPas grandes fautes.
I am now completing my last year of high school in economic and social sciences at the (name of my school) where I have
The History of Art is also one of my passions, and my multiple stays in Italy, more precisely Tuscany, enabled (1) me to improve my culture (2) in this field. (3)
(1) present perfect
(2) You are not improving "your culture" you are gaining exposure to other cultures or improving your understanding of this field, etc.
(3) Suivez les conseils de gerondif.
Réponse: Lettre de motivation/correction de anneej, postée le 30-03-2011 à 14:03:13 (S | E)
Merci de votre aide!
Cours gratuits > Forum > Thèmes généraux, jeux, chansons
