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Message de nya44 posté le 30-01-2011 à 13:59:03 (S | E | F)
Hello everybody
Je rédige une petite lettre de motivation en anglais pour l'envoyer en Hollande ! Cependant, j'ai des petits doutes quant à ma rédaction, j'ai bien peur que je fasse trop de traduction mot-à-mot, et donc que ma lettre soit du charabia !
Avez-vous des corrections à me suggérer ?
Merci d'avance !
Ma lettre :
Dear Mr.,
I am a student in France in BTS 'Management and Protection of Nature ", option "Management of natural areas”, I have the opportunity to perform a training period during 4 weeks between April and May, in the domain of my choice. I would like have experience coming out of the ordinary, do my internship abroad.
In 1997, a student of my training has incorporated the SRRC, and with the description of his internship, I am extremely motivated to join you, and to participate in various activities that you will offer me.
This will allow me to refine my skills in a first time, and achieve real action in the domain who I am studying since the beginning of year.
I would like really to work with you, as a trainee or volunteer.
Moreover, coming to the Netherlands would make me improve my English and also I will discover a new culture and a new country!
Hoping that you take my request into consideration.
Yours faithfully,
MA SIGNATURE
PS: Please find enclosed my curriculum vitae.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-01-2011 17:10
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Message de nya44 posté le 30-01-2011 à 13:59:03 (S | E | F)
Hello everybody
Je rédige une petite lettre de motivation en anglais pour l'envoyer en Hollande ! Cependant, j'ai des petits doutes quant à ma rédaction, j'ai bien peur que je fasse trop de traduction mot-à-mot, et donc que ma lettre soit du charabia !
Avez-vous des corrections à me suggérer ?
Merci d'avance !
Ma lettre :
Dear Mr.,
I am a student in France in BTS 'Management and Protection of Nature ", option "Management of natural areas”, I have the opportunity to perform a training period during 4 weeks between April and May, in the domain of my choice. I would like have experience coming out of the ordinary, do my internship abroad.
In 1997, a student of my training has incorporated the SRRC, and with the description of his internship, I am extremely motivated to join you, and to participate in various activities that you will offer me.
This will allow me to refine my skills in a first time, and achieve real action in the domain who I am studying since the beginning of year.
I would like really to work with you, as a trainee or volunteer.
Moreover, coming to the Netherlands would make me improve my English and also I will discover a new culture and a new country!
Hoping that you take my request into consideration.
Yours faithfully,
MA SIGNATURE
PS: Please find enclosed my curriculum vitae.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-01-2011 17:10
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Réponse: Aide lettre de motivation de may, postée le 30-01-2011 à 17:07:17 (S | E)
Bonjour,
J'ai quelques suggestions
Dear Mr., Si vous savez son nom, si non Dear Sir,
I am a student in France in BTS 'Management and Protection of Nature ", option "Management of natural areas”, I have the opportunity to perform a training period during oui, mais une autre prép. sera mieux 4 weeks between April and May, in the domain of my choice. I would like have infinitive experience coming out of the ordinary, do ing form my internship abroad.
In 1997, a student of autre préposition my
training/trouver un autre expression has incorporated the SRRC, and with the description of his internship, I am extremely motivated to join you, and to participate in various activities that you will offer me.This will allow me to refine my skills in a first time, and achieve real action in the domain who I am studying since the beginning of article défini year.
I would like really/placer avant like to work with you, as a trainee or article volunteer.
Moreover, coming to the Netherlands would make me improve my English and also I will discover a new culture and a new country!
Hoping that you take my request into consideration. Thank you very much for your attention.
Yours faithfully,
MA SIGNATURE
PS: Please find enclosed my curriculum vitae.
Réponse: Aide lettre de motivation de headway, postée le 30-01-2011 à 17:16:00 (S | E)
Bonjour,
En complément des remarques de May:
"I am a French student
Cordialement.
Headway.
Réponse: Aide lettre de motivation de nya44, postée le 30-01-2011 à 18:07:22 (S | E)
Alors si j'ai bien écouté vos suggestions, le résultat devrait être pas trop mal !
Dear Sir,
I am a French student in HND 'Management and Protection of Nature ", option "Management of natural areas”, I have the opportunity to go on a 4 weeks training period between April and May, in the domain of my choice. I would like to have an experience coming out of the ordinary, doing my internship abroad.
In 1997, a student from the same HND (in the same school) has incorporated the SRRC, and with the description of his internship, I am extremely motivated to join you, and to participate in various activities that you will offer me.
This will allow me to refine my skills in a first time, and achieve real action in the domain who I am studying since the beginning of the year.
I would really like to work with you, as a trainee or a volunteer.
Moreover, coming to the Netherlands would make me improve my English and also I will discover a new culture and a new country!
Thank you very much for your attention.
Yours faithfully,
MA SIGNATURE
PS: Please find enclosed my curriculum vitae.
D'autre part, j'envoie aussi une lettre en Finlande, que pensez-vous de ce paragraphe ? :
Your forest Finnish (je précise car l'organisme en a 14 dans le monde) interest me a lot; first, it has an environnemental richness impressive, and also for the sustainable
management that you made for the timber/wood prodution.-------------------
Modifié par lucile83 le 30-01-2011 21:03
Réponse: Aide lettre de motivation de may, postée le 30-01-2011 à 22:33:58 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Oui, très bien..
Dear Sir,
I am a French student in HND 'Management and Protection of Nature ", option "Management of natural areas”, I have the opportunity to go on a 4 weeks training period between April and May, in the domain of my choice. I would like to have an experience coming out of the ordinary, doing my internship abroad.
In 1997, a student from the same HND (in the same school) has incorporated the SRRC, and with the description of his internship, I am extremely motivated to join you, and to participate in various activities that you will offer me.
This will allow me to refine my skills in a/ autre prép.+ article défini first time, and achieve /prendre real action in the domain who/autre pronom I am studying/present perfect continuous since the beginning of the year.
I would really like to work with you, as a trainee or a volunteer.
Moreover, coming to the Netherlands would make me improve my English and also I will discover a new culture and a new country!
Thank you very much for your attention.
Yours faithfully,
MA SIGNATURE
PS: Please find enclosed my curriculum vitae.
D'autre part, j'envoie aussi une lettre en Finlande, que pensez-vous de ce paragraphe ? :
Your forest Finnish besoin un nom(je précise car l'organisme en a 14 dans le monde) interest/ temps présent perfect me a lot; first, it has an environnemental richness impressive/ rephrase/ou est le nom , and also
Best wishes,
Réponse: Aide lettre de motivation de nya44, postée le 30-01-2011 à 22:44:31 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup ! Eh bien, toutes ces lettres de motivation m'auront fait réviser mes rudiments d'anglais :D !
Réponse: Aide lettre de motivation de headway, postée le 31-01-2011 à 08:19:27 (S | E)
Bonjour,
a 4week
Ici, "4-week" est un syntagme adjectival, donc pas de "s" à "week".
Je reviens pour la suite.
Headway.
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