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Message de babou795 posté le 12-08-2010 à 16:28:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Je viens de faire ma lettre de motivation Erasmus, dans le but de partir à l'étranger et j'aimerais que quelqu'un puisse me la corriger si possible. Je vous remercie d'avance. Bonne journée
Dear Sir/Madam,
APPLYING FOR THE ERASMUS PROGRAM IN YOUR UNIVERSITY
Presently I am a fourth year student of the business school **** in Paris, I would be glad to make an exchange for the Erasmus program in your university.
Known for its experience, this international network will help me to reach my professional goals in the best circumstances.
Studying abroad is an enormous opportunity that I do not want to miss. Leaving my country does not scare me, on the contrary, I know that it is a real challenge on which I can take all the opportunities.
Concerning my experience, I already took advantage of the Erasmus program this year. Indeed, these six months at the Budapest Business School in Hungary helped me to improve my English level. In addition, I discovered a new culture, a new language and I increased my professional network. Thanks to this network, I evolved positively in terms of personal development. After validating this semester in Budapest, I can say that these six months have been a success and that is why I would like start this experience again.
After making my English better during this first semester abroad, I would like to improve my level of Spanish by now.
Global city in terms of economy and trade, Barcelona is the city that I choose for this Erasmus destination. Cultural hub, this city is the best way to speak Spanish and English. Barcelona fits with my profile: cosmopolitan, dynamic and open-minded.
As a European wishing to have an international career, I think your university is a wonderful start for me to have a new insight and a different approach to business from the Spanish point of view. With an outstanding reputation and known for its modernity and its innovation, your University of Pompeu Fabra is the most appropriate for my professional goals.
I am very much looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
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Modifié par bridg le 12-08-2010 16:34
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Message de babou795 posté le 12-08-2010 à 16:28:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Je viens de faire ma lettre de motivation Erasmus, dans le but de partir à l'étranger et j'aimerais que quelqu'un puisse me la corriger si possible. Je vous remercie d'avance. Bonne journée
Dear Sir/Madam,
APPLYING FOR THE ERASMUS PROGRAM IN YOUR UNIVERSITY
Presently I am a fourth year student of the business school **** in Paris, I would be glad to make an exchange for the Erasmus program in your university.
Known for its experience, this international network will help me to reach my professional goals in the best circumstances.
Studying abroad is an enormous opportunity that I do not want to miss. Leaving my country does not scare me, on the contrary, I know that it is a real challenge on which I can take all the opportunities.
Concerning my experience, I already took advantage of the Erasmus program this year. Indeed, these six months at the Budapest Business School in Hungary helped me to improve my English level. In addition, I discovered a new culture, a new language and I increased my professional network. Thanks to this network, I evolved positively in terms of personal development. After validating this semester in Budapest, I can say that these six months have been a success and that is why I would like start this experience again.
After making my English better during this first semester abroad, I would like to improve my level of Spanish by now.
Global city in terms of economy and trade, Barcelona is the city that I choose for this Erasmus destination. Cultural hub, this city is the best way to speak Spanish and English. Barcelona fits with my profile: cosmopolitan, dynamic and open-minded.
As a European wishing to have an international career, I think your university is a wonderful start for me to have a new insight and a different approach to business from the Spanish point of view. With an outstanding reputation and known for its modernity and its innovation, your University of Pompeu Fabra is the most appropriate for my professional goals.
I am very much looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
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Modifié par bridg le 12-08-2010 16:34
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Réponse: Correction lettre motivation erasmus de may, postée le 14-08-2010 à 04:09:10 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Dear Sir/Madam,
APPLYING FOR THE ERASMUS PROGRAM IN YOUR UNIVERSITY
Presently ponctuation I am a fourth year student ofautre préposition the le nom d'école business school( **** ) in Paris, I would be glad to make autre verbe an exchange for the Erasmus program in your university.
Known for autre préposition its experience, this international network will conditional help me to reach my professional goals in the best circumstances.
Studying abroad is an enormous opportunity that I do not want présent perfect to miss. Leaving my country does notfutur scare me, on the contrary, (I know that) it is a real challenge (on) which I can takeautre verbe all the opportunities.
Concerning my experience, I already took advantage of the Erasmus program this year quand? dans le passé. Indeed In fact, these six months at the Budapest Business School in Hungary helped me to improve my English level. In addition, I discovered a new culture, a new language and I increased my professional network skill?. Thanks to this network, I evolved positively in terms of personal development. After validating this semester in Budapest, I can say that these six months have beenpréterit a success and that is why I would like manqué un mot start this experience again.
After makingautre verbe my English better during this first semester abroad, I would like to improve my level of Spanish by now.dans la même temps?
(Global city in terms of economy and trade)comprends pas la phrase dans le parenthèse/besoin une connection, Barcelona is the city that I choose for this Erasmus destination. Cultural hub, this city is the best wayle mot way n'est pas approprié to speak Spanish and English. Barcelona fits with my profile: cosmopolitan, dynamic and open-minded.
As a European wishing to have an international career, I think your university is a wonderful start for me to have a new insight and a different approach to business from the Spanish point of view. With an outstanding reputation (and known) for its modernity and its innovation, your University of Pompeu Fabra is the most appropriate for my professional goals.
I am ( very much ) looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
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Good luck,
Réponse: Correction lettre motivation erasmus de babou795, postée le 17-08-2010 à 14:16:57 (S | E)
Thanks you very much
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