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Message de ben773 posté le 26-03-2009 à 18:18:30 (S | E | F)
Chers utilisateurs de langue de Shakespeare,
Bonjour à tous !
Je sollicite votre aide. Je termine mon dossier de candidature pour des universités anglophones. J'ai rédigé un CV américain avec une rubrique skills, spécialisé Marketing et Publicité dans le luxe. Je doute de certaines de mes phrases. Pouvez-vous me donner votre avis svp?
D'avance merci !
Marketing
Developed skills in analysis, creativity and organisation in marketing and communications. Improved negotiation abilities thanks to an experience in sales. Displayed advanced skills in premium product/brand communications in the luxury industry. Developed team-building and decision-making during associative experiences and group projects.
Advertising
Strong culture of luxury/premium brand identity. Developed advanced creative business skills in strategy and design by managing on-line and off-line communications. Worked at agency and for announcers. Studied Communications during two years, then International Business to get a multicultural approach of Advertising.
Luxury Industry
Author of www.***.fr blog, wrote articles dealing with branding strategy, market analysis, advertising, in the luxury goods and services industry. Contacted by luxury brands such as **** or **** for products launches. Acquired knowledge of luxury business practices in a luxury consulting internship.
J'espère que vous pourrez me venir en aide. Merci !
Ben
Réponse: Writing about Marketing and Advertising de lauretess, postée le 30-03-2009 à 18:10:33 (S | E)
Hi Ben,
experience est un indénombrable, pas de "an"
during two years = impossible pour une durée. Mettre for two years. During seulement s'emploie pour une époque (summer, ...)
Hope this helps