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Message de sirine20 posté le 11-10-2019 à 01:58:59 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir !
Voici le résumé d'un article,et je vous prie de le corriger s'il vous plait !
Cybernetic immortality is considered as a scientific problem by those scientists who aim to make the human lifespan lasting forever; through uploading the human brain into a computer. And what makes sure that this will truly happen comes from the scientific and the practical results that will be reached nearly; such as the creation of avatars and holograms and the possibility of the human brain replication. Currently, science is in the process of making it the digital immortality, believing to perform consciousness transplanting ; but nobody is sure that this will work or not.
Merci d'avance
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Modifié par lucile83 le 11-10-2019 08:19
Message de sirine20 posté le 11-10-2019 à 01:58:59 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir !
Voici le résumé d'un article,et je vous prie de le corriger s'il vous plait !
Cybernetic immortality is considered as a scientific problem by those scientists who aim to make the human lifespan lasting forever; through uploading the human brain into a computer. And what makes sure that this will truly happen comes from the scientific and the practical results that will be reached nearly; such as the creation of avatars and holograms and the possibility of the human brain replication. Currently, science is in the process of making it the digital immortality, believing to perform consciousness transplanting ; but nobody is sure that this will work or not.
Merci d'avance
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Modifié par lucile83 le 11-10-2019 08:19
Réponse : Besoin d'aide/article de here4u, postée le 12-10-2019 à 11:58:42 (S | E)
Hello!
Revoir toute la ponctuation de ce texte.
Cybernetic immortality is considered as a scientific problem by those scientists who aim to make the human lifespan lasting forever; through uploading the human brain (mal dit !) into a computer
revoir la ponctuation qui n'est pas cohérente !). And what makes sure that this will truly happen comes from the scientific and the practical results that will be reached nearly
;(même remarque pour la ponctuation)nearly= presque?) such as the creation of avatars and holograms and the possibility of the human brain replication(this isn't a sentence!). Currently, science is in the process of making it the digital immortality, believing to perform consciousness transplanting ; but nobody is sure that this will work or not."and" et "but" ne sont pas des mots de liaison satisfaisants en début de phrases !
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