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Message de scop28 posté le 13-04-2019 à 21:16:28 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pouvez-vous corriger ce textesvp s'il vous plait.
Merci pour votre aide..
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Malcolm Little was born in Omaha (USA) on, May 19th 1925 and murdered on February 21th 1965 in Harlem (New York). He was an African-American Muslim preacher,speaker and human rights activist. It was realy hard for him to heard the death of his father, (a Baptist preacher murdered by activists close to the Ku Klux Klan, in 1931). Very good at school, Malcom wanted a lawer to be but his teacher told him it was impossible because he was black. In this racial context, it was impossible to make his dreams true.
In 1946, he was imprisoned for delinquency(burglaries). During his stay in prison, he read a lot of books which was very instructive for him. In the same time he discovered Nation of Islam, a political-religious organization with his leader Elijah Muhammad. He joined this sectarism Muslim movement marked by a black nationalism and the rejection of the white man which was considered as exploitative ans capitalist.When he was released from prison in 1952, Malcolm Little took the nickname Malcolm X because he did not know his real name. Little was the name of the master of one of his slave ancestors. He is appreciated for his qualities of speaker and quickly becomes the spokesperson of the organization. He preaches black separatism and defends the idea of creating an independent black republic within the United States. Malcom X plays an important role in the conversion to Islam of boxer Cassius Clay, Cassius changes his name to Muhammad Ali. In March 1964, Malcolm X left Nation of Islam, which
wasn't a real religious and political movement. After that, he converted to Islam and in April 1964, he made a pilgrimage to Mecca and see white and black people reunited in this holy city. Despite his past, he condemned the anti-white racism of Nation of Islam and founded the Organization for African-American Unity, a non-religious and political movement, making the unity of all blacks his priority.Martin Luther King will make non-violence one of the central principles to get civil rights while for Malcolm X, violence could be a legitimate form of resistance. Malcom X sees himself more as a citizen of the world who seeks to unite oppressed on the planet. He was already against of any form of injustice because he lived as a black fatherless who endured social misery. Even if, he makes some mistakes in his life, his speeches had a real impact. But the most powerful aspect of Malcolm X is his capacity to learn his mistakes and move forward. The knowledge was his weapon. Unfortunately, few people wanted his life to stop because they saw his potential danger.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-04-2019 21:52
Mise en forme standard.
Message de scop28 posté le 13-04-2019 à 21:16:28 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pouvez-vous corriger ce texte
Merci pour votre aide..
Parlez d'un personnage que vous appréciez:
Malcolm Little was born in Omaha (USA) on, May 19th 1925 and murdered on February 21th 1965 in Harlem (New York). He was an African-American Muslim preacher,speaker and human rights activist. It was realy hard for him to heard the death of his father, (a Baptist preacher murdered by activists close to the Ku Klux Klan, in 1931). Very good at school, Malcom wanted a lawer to be but his teacher told him it was impossible because he was black. In this racial context, it was impossible to make his dreams true.
In 1946, he was imprisoned for delinquency(burglaries). During his stay in prison, he read a lot of books which was very instructive for him. In the same time he discovered Nation of Islam, a political-religious organization with his leader Elijah Muhammad. He joined this sectarism Muslim movement marked by a black nationalism and the rejection of the white man which was considered as exploitative ans capitalist.When he was released from prison in 1952, Malcolm Little took the nickname Malcolm X because he did not know his real name. Little was the name of the master of one of his slave ancestors. He is appreciated for his qualities of speaker and quickly becomes the spokesperson of the organization. He preaches black separatism and defends the idea of creating an independent black republic within the United States. Malcom X plays an important role in the conversion to Islam of boxer Cassius Clay, Cassius changes his name to Muhammad Ali. In March 1964, Malcolm X left Nation of Islam, which
wasn't a real religious and political movement. After that, he converted to Islam and in April 1964, he made a pilgrimage to Mecca and see white and black people reunited in this holy city. Despite his past, he condemned the anti-white racism of Nation of Islam and founded the Organization for African-American Unity, a non-religious and political movement, making the unity of all blacks his priority.Martin Luther King will make non-violence one of the central principles to get civil rights while for Malcolm X, violence could be a legitimate form of resistance. Malcom X sees himself more as a citizen of the world who seeks to unite oppressed on the planet. He was already against of any form of injustice because he lived as a black fatherless who endured social misery. Even if, he makes some mistakes in his life, his speeches had a real impact. But the most powerful aspect of Malcolm X is his capacity to learn his mistakes and move forward. The knowledge was his weapon. Unfortunately, few people wanted his life to stop because they saw his potential danger.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-04-2019 21:52
Mise en forme standard.
Réponse : Correction/expression écrite de vaiana, postée le 13-04-2019 à 21:44:25 (S | E)
Hello!
Commencez par mettre tous vos verbes au prétérit
Par la même occasion, n'hésitez pas à refaire votre présentation de manière à ce que votre travail soit agréable à lire pour les correcteurs
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